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Distractions - A Poem

March 11th 2007 23:43
Yet .. Still I long for you / alternate title distractions
written June 4 - 1194

Someone over in another blog "dissed" rhyming structureed verse as doggerel so

Here's some thing I wrote that rhymes !

I was doing post graduate classics studies at the time


I Study my obscure esoteric old volumes,

I sigh and turn to lighter books equally old,

Sweet ancient lyrics freed now from large dusty rooms,

The treasures hidden that library shelves can hold.

yet still I long for you

I hunt for the newest writings of philosophy,


Tire and open some fresh novel of fantasy,

Enjoying sharing some echoes of other hearts' dreamings,

A Variable feast of alien strange whisperings!

yet still I long for you

You are so distant and yet warm flesh seems better

Two desires can touch and fuse together

Into One Love that with luck might last and lengthen

Since Love's flame if hallowed can the heart strengthen

but such dreams rarely come true
yet oh still I long for you!


I'm sorry to say the person for who this was written never got to read it!

Poem copyright J. Vaux 1994 2007

You can quote and copy it for personal use though!

So readers which is better rhymed structuted verse or free verse?
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Comment by Lily

March 12th 2007 06:24
Hi Julie,

I think it depends on individual taste, horses for courses and all that.. but for me, free verse is the way to go.. i find rhyming very hard, and feel it limits me to what i want to say...

~Lily

Comment by scholia

March 12th 2007 08:33
It's not limiting if you learn your craft and study prosody. And read the classics!!!




Comment by Lily

March 12th 2007 09:47
please don't assume I haven't read the classics, Scholia.. this is a debate i won't have, as by your comment, i see you are entrenched...

~Lily

Comment by scholia

March 13th 2007 07:03
The Classics in which languages?

I ask out of curiosity not in an attempt to start a debate!

It's just a lot of "free" verse ie the 1920 Imagists was inspired by bad translations of Chinese verse?

Like wise its almost impossible in english to capture the assonance effects in many Japanese haiku?








Comment by Lily

March 13th 2007 11:18
I read the Classics in the English language, my primary and only language, and in my study of Haiku, i have learnt what you stated. To capture the essence of life in 17 syllables in english, is hard enough.

Scholia, i would never critisize anyone for writing in Rhyme, it takes a talent, one i don't possess, nor have the discipline it requires, though i do feel the classic Rhymers, remain unmatched in modern day poetry, in my opinion only.

For me, and i don't represent everyone i know, my style is free style, or free fall ~ as truly, it's the only medium that allows me to walk the wide open spaces, or run skip stroll, or whatever pace my mood, my muse sets, and i can claim every word.

~Lily


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